A comment I made on a peers paper was, “Put this sentence in the beginning of your paragraph.” This peer was very good at writing and stating points and explaining them with examples from the text. But, as I came across this one particular sentence it just seemed to be misplaced and would sound better in the beginning of the paragraph, rather than the end. This would fit under the category of organization because it involves moving a piece of writing to another spot to help make the paragraph stronger and flow.

A second comment I made was, “On resources and spending too much time to create these pieces” and “getting access to these resources.” I wrote these after a couple sentences because it would help further this peers paper as it is giving a little bit more information from what they had. One of these comments was a correction of wording in the sentence because as I was reading, it didn’t sound right. This would fit under the category of evidence. This is because the writer was making a claim/statement and by rewording or adding a little information to what was already said makes the peers evidence and explanation stronger.

A third comment I made was, “Even if people try to disagree he needs to stay strong in his beliefs and what he knows and has learned. He can shape society by having this mindset. A positive domino effect. Not to let anyone change his mind. Relates back to art: Southan stays strong in his heart with continuing to make art because it’s what makes him happy. The EA tried to make him feel guilty.” This comment was a little long, but this peer had asked for help with ideas on how to finish up the last paragraph and how to tie what she was saying all together for her last point. So that is what I did. I added some of my thoughts to add on what she was explaining. This would fall under the category of ideas because as I said, she needed ideas on how to finish up her thought and how to wrap it all up.  

This time around editing, I feel like focusing on global edits over local edits was a lot more useful and helpful. I have always somewhat enjoyed editing other people’s work. For myself, I am not the best writer, or editor, but getting a change to read other peoples work in their writing process definitely helps me to be a better writer. By editing other work, I have a chance to learn how to better structure my sentences and it has also aided in making my grammar better. I also want to gain a bigger vocabulary to help make my own essay sound stronger. When reading I can see others thoughts and their process and compare it to my own and can see where I myself might have gotten lost trying to explain a thought. Reading different styles of writings and opinions are pretty cool and making bigger, global edits has more of an impact, even if it takes a little extra time to do.